Friday, 7 February 2014

Kyah's Story

Thump! Thump! Thump! I could hear Dad's footsteps from the hallway. I started shaking with excitement. What could it be? I started thinking. It could be anything...

My excitement levels were beaming, higher and higher. My chest was thumping. Dad walked in the room and I didn't have a clue what to say. Raquel looked at me and she was more excited than I was. I told myself "this must be awesome"

Rip, rip, rip. I started tearing it to bits. It was triangle and in a telecom bag. I thought it must be a computer, camera or iPod. Looking around the room I waited for Dad to say I could open the bag. Tick, tock, tick, tock. He shouted ''Open''. It was...

An iPhone 4S! I sat there there with my mouth open. I thought and said, "I didn't want one of those. I want and iPod touch instead!"

Oh well close enough though

1 comment:

  1. Kyah
    I really enjoyed reading your story and it kept me interested because the ending was a surprise. I liked the bit where you wrote 'rip, rip, rip' about opening the present that was exciting and I was interested and excited to read what it was going to be. Looking forward to see more of your writing online.
    Mr Webb and Room One, Auroa.